Chapter 20 - Proposing a Solution - Exercise
“Uncle Sam and Aunt Samantha” - Pages 306 - 308 - Reading for Better Writing Exercise:
1. What problem(s) does Quindlen identify? What solution(s) does she propose? To what extent would the proposed solution(s) solve the problem(s) Quindlen discusses?
I see the problem that Quindlen identifies is that in this country, only men, ages 18-25 are to be drafted if need be, not women. She proposes that both men and women, ages 18-25 should be drafted if need be. I think that her solution to the problem is a good one. I am not sure if I agree with it, but it would solve her problem of inequality in this country when it comes to a draft.
2. Review the section in Chapter 17 about “Identifying Logical Fallacies” (see pages 255-258). Quindlen’s opponents might accuse her of “wither/or thinking,” pointing out that instead of addressing only two options, she could also have argued to end the draft for everyone. What other logical fallacies might Quindlen’s opponents accuse her of making? Would you agree with them? Why or why not?
Appealing to pity, appealing to popular sentiment, attack against the person, and slanted language are some of the fallacies I see to be in this essay by Quindlen. I think, and do agree that these fallacies are present in this paper. I think that Quindlen’s voice throughout this paper shows a negative connotation. I think she preys on the reader’s pity that men are to be drafted, but women are not. That her son will have to enroll at age 18, but her daughter will not. I think her voice should have been smoother throughout this paper.
3. What strategies does Quindlen use to try to convince readers that the situation she describes is problematic?
Quindlen talks about the differences in women in this country to the women in Afghanistan. She also talks about how people in this country do not want their sons to get drafted, just like they would not want their daughters to get drafted. She points out that there should be equality in this country when it comes to this matter. She is trying to show that women and men are equal and should be treated that way on every level, on every issue.
4. Why does the writer acknowledge that there may be opposition to her description of the problem and to her proposed solution? How does she respond to these counterarguments?
One way that the writer acknowledges an opposition is talking about how people think that women are made of the finer stuff, but in this day and age made of the right stuff. Because of this, she says that right comes with responsibility and teachers teach their students this. But because women do not get drafted, it goes against what is taught in this country.
5. Why does the essay open with a series of one-sentence paragraphs? How might the effect of the essay differ if these sentences had been combined into one paragraph?
I think the writer opens this essay with a series of one-sentence paragraphs for a dramatic effect. She really wants to highlight some facts. If they were all combined into one paragraph, I think they would loose that dramatic, highlighted effect.
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Saturday, May 2, 2009
Sunday, April 19, 2009
Chapter 19 - Persuading Readers to Act - Exercise
Chapter 19: Persuading Readers to Act - Exercise
Soul of a Citizen: Living with Conviction in a Cynical Time - Pages 288 - 290 - Reading for Better Writing Exercise:
1. What is the writer arguing for and against? What does he want readers to do? Look at the question in the opening paragraph. What answer does Loeb present?
The writer is arguing for public participation. He wants the readers to be more active in speaking out and making this country and the world a better place for us and for our grandchildren to come. Loeb answers his question in paragraph one by telling the reader to stand up for what they believe in. He wants to the reader to understand that your voice/ opinion can matter. And he shows the reader some examples of how a person he knows and people from history have made a difference. He shows us how, in fact, people in history spent more time than you think in the causes for which they believed in.
2. What efforts does Loeb make to address readers’ questions, concerns, and opposing arguments? Are these efforts successful? Explain.
I think that Loeb points out in this essay how most people think that their voice does not matter or would never be heard no matter what they did or do. But he addresses this concern with his examples; showing how the people in these examples kept pushing and working towards the changes they believed in. With all their hard work it paid off for them in the end. Changes were made in favor of what they believed in.
3. Consider the examples Loeb offers: Pete Knutson and Rosa Parks. Do these examples work as support for the writer’s claims? Why or why not?
I believe these examples do work in favor of the writer’s claims. He shows the reader how these people; Pete Knutson and Rosa Parks kept working towards what they believed in. He showed how these individuals kept letting their voices be heard over and over again. He showed how maybe at first it seemed as though their claims went unnoticed or at first nothing changed. But with persistence, changes were made.
4. Broadly speaking, what is the author’s view of life, and how does that perspective come through in this essay?
I believe that the author’s view of life is that we, as human beings are not caring as much about the world around us. He believes that we are not thinking about the future of this world. We allow some to starve as others live with many riches. I believe the author thinks that we, as human begins, are not acting in a way that we should be. We allow extraordinary imbalances to take place. And most of all, we do not speak up about anything. We all kind of jut live in our own little bubbles. I think the author gives you something to think about when you read this essay. He makes you think of how you can change yourself to make a different in this world.
Soul of a Citizen: Living with Conviction in a Cynical Time - Pages 288 - 290 - Reading for Better Writing Exercise:
1. What is the writer arguing for and against? What does he want readers to do? Look at the question in the opening paragraph. What answer does Loeb present?
The writer is arguing for public participation. He wants the readers to be more active in speaking out and making this country and the world a better place for us and for our grandchildren to come. Loeb answers his question in paragraph one by telling the reader to stand up for what they believe in. He wants to the reader to understand that your voice/ opinion can matter. And he shows the reader some examples of how a person he knows and people from history have made a difference. He shows us how, in fact, people in history spent more time than you think in the causes for which they believed in.
2. What efforts does Loeb make to address readers’ questions, concerns, and opposing arguments? Are these efforts successful? Explain.
I think that Loeb points out in this essay how most people think that their voice does not matter or would never be heard no matter what they did or do. But he addresses this concern with his examples; showing how the people in these examples kept pushing and working towards the changes they believed in. With all their hard work it paid off for them in the end. Changes were made in favor of what they believed in.
3. Consider the examples Loeb offers: Pete Knutson and Rosa Parks. Do these examples work as support for the writer’s claims? Why or why not?
I believe these examples do work in favor of the writer’s claims. He shows the reader how these people; Pete Knutson and Rosa Parks kept working towards what they believed in. He showed how these individuals kept letting their voices be heard over and over again. He showed how maybe at first it seemed as though their claims went unnoticed or at first nothing changed. But with persistence, changes were made.
4. Broadly speaking, what is the author’s view of life, and how does that perspective come through in this essay?
I believe that the author’s view of life is that we, as human beings are not caring as much about the world around us. He believes that we are not thinking about the future of this world. We allow some to starve as others live with many riches. I believe the author thinks that we, as human begins, are not acting in a way that we should be. We allow extraordinary imbalances to take place. And most of all, we do not speak up about anything. We all kind of jut live in our own little bubbles. I think the author gives you something to think about when you read this essay. He makes you think of how you can change yourself to make a different in this world.
Saturday, April 11, 2009
Chapter 18 - Taking a Position Exercise
Chapter 18 - Taking a Position Exercise
Reading for Better Writing - “An Apology for the Life of Ms. Barbie D. Doll”
Pages 265 - 266 - Exercise:
1. The word apology can mean defense, as well as a statement of regret for wrongdoing. Is the use of the word fitting in the title? Why or why not?
I don’t really think that the word apology in the title of this article is fitting. I think that the use of that word in the title gives a tone of sarcasm to the article. I can see how the author uses the word apology in the title as more of a defense to the Barbie doll, but I am not sure if I’d use that word. I think I would have a title more along the lines of, “The Misjudged Life of Ms. Barbie D. Doll.”
2. This essay is a counterargument that replies heavily on logic and personal experience for support. How does the writer treat the original source? How do concessions and rebuttals function in this argument?
I think the reader treats the original source with a great deal of insult. Almost as if this author feels the original source has no clue what they were talking about. I think that the idea to a good argumentative or persuasive paper is not to bash the opposing side, but to have an open mind and gently make rebuttals to it. I feel this author was offended deeply by the original source.
Reading for Better Writing - “An Apology for the Life of Ms. Barbie D. Doll”
Pages 265 - 266 - Exercise:
1. The word apology can mean defense, as well as a statement of regret for wrongdoing. Is the use of the word fitting in the title? Why or why not?
I don’t really think that the word apology in the title of this article is fitting. I think that the use of that word in the title gives a tone of sarcasm to the article. I can see how the author uses the word apology in the title as more of a defense to the Barbie doll, but I am not sure if I’d use that word. I think I would have a title more along the lines of, “The Misjudged Life of Ms. Barbie D. Doll.”
2. This essay is a counterargument that replies heavily on logic and personal experience for support. How does the writer treat the original source? How do concessions and rebuttals function in this argument?
I think the reader treats the original source with a great deal of insult. Almost as if this author feels the original source has no clue what they were talking about. I think that the idea to a good argumentative or persuasive paper is not to bash the opposing side, but to have an open mind and gently make rebuttals to it. I feel this author was offended deeply by the original source.
Sunday, March 22, 2009
Chapter 16 - Definition - Exercise
“The College Writer” - Chapter 16 Definition - Exercise
Understanding Dementia - Pages 235 - 237 - Reading for Better Writing:
1. Describe how the writer introduces the topic, and explain why the introduction is or is not effective.
The author introduces the topic by using a monologue from a personal experience of hers. I think this essay was started in a very effective way because it lets you into the disease itself. It makes you feel a personal experience of the disease.
2. Describe how the writer distinguishes the class (dementia) from the specific illness within that class. How are the illnesses within the class defined and explained?
The author tells the reader of the health problems that are considered to be known as the broad topic of dementia. These health problems include Alzheimer’s disease, brain tumors, arteriosclerosis, and hardening of the arteries. She then goes on to explain the symptoms that dementia and the outlined health problems can cause.
3. The writer extends her definition by focusing largely on the symptoms of the disease. Examine her strategies for doing so, and explain whether you find them effective.
The writer explains how dementia causes short-term and long-term memory loss, depression and behavioral changes such as anger or even schizophrenia. I think by the writer talking about all the symptoms it is very effective. It helps the reader to understand in more detail what the disease does to a person.
4. Review how the writer closes with an appeal to readers. Is the closing fitting? Why or why not?
I think the closing the writer chose is very fitting. She, being a person with personal experiences dealing with dementia has an understanding of ways that people can help. She does a nice job of wrapping up the essay with a main point that there is no cure for dementia, but people can help with providing love, kindness and patience.
Understanding Dementia - Pages 235 - 237 - Reading for Better Writing:
1. Describe how the writer introduces the topic, and explain why the introduction is or is not effective.
The author introduces the topic by using a monologue from a personal experience of hers. I think this essay was started in a very effective way because it lets you into the disease itself. It makes you feel a personal experience of the disease.
2. Describe how the writer distinguishes the class (dementia) from the specific illness within that class. How are the illnesses within the class defined and explained?
The author tells the reader of the health problems that are considered to be known as the broad topic of dementia. These health problems include Alzheimer’s disease, brain tumors, arteriosclerosis, and hardening of the arteries. She then goes on to explain the symptoms that dementia and the outlined health problems can cause.
3. The writer extends her definition by focusing largely on the symptoms of the disease. Examine her strategies for doing so, and explain whether you find them effective.
The writer explains how dementia causes short-term and long-term memory loss, depression and behavioral changes such as anger or even schizophrenia. I think by the writer talking about all the symptoms it is very effective. It helps the reader to understand in more detail what the disease does to a person.
4. Review how the writer closes with an appeal to readers. Is the closing fitting? Why or why not?
I think the closing the writer chose is very fitting. She, being a person with personal experiences dealing with dementia has an understanding of ways that people can help. She does a nice job of wrapping up the essay with a main point that there is no cure for dementia, but people can help with providing love, kindness and patience.
Sunday, March 8, 2009
Chapter 15 - Process Writing Exercise
Chapter 15 - Process Writing - Exercise
Hair Today, Gone Tomorrow - Pages 222-223 - Reading for Better Writing:
1. The writer uses an analogy to describe the process of how hair grows. List the elements of the analogy, along with corresponding elements of the process. Then explain why the analogy is or is not effective.
Analogies:
Field of grass - your skull
Two layers of soil - scalp (common skin)
First layer of clay - dermis
On top of that a layer of rich, black dirt - epidermis
100,000 little holes - follicles
Grass seed - papilla
Gardner comes along and cuts the grass - barber snips it
I think these analogies used in this short essay about hair/ hair loss are effective. I see how a field of grass is just like a head of hair. I really think the author did a great job using all the analogies he did in this essay.
2. The writer uses an illustration to show parts of a hair stem. Study the illustration and explain why it does or does no help clarify the message.
I think that that above image that was included in the essay by the author does give you a better visual and helps to clarify the story. I mean, I think the author did a fantastic job of giving the reader visualization of the message just in his analogies; but I think this illustration gave more to the essay.
3. Review the introduction to the essay, noting the author’s purpose for the writing. Then describe his voice and explain why it does or does not help his purpose.
I think the author’s introduction to the essay was a good way to lead into his purpose. He sets up his analogies right away. I thin his voice throughout the essay shows his knowledge of hair and his ability to relate that to a field of grass.
Hair Today, Gone Tomorrow - Pages 222-223 - Reading for Better Writing:
1. The writer uses an analogy to describe the process of how hair grows. List the elements of the analogy, along with corresponding elements of the process. Then explain why the analogy is or is not effective.
Analogies:
Field of grass - your skull
Two layers of soil - scalp (common skin)
First layer of clay - dermis
On top of that a layer of rich, black dirt - epidermis
100,000 little holes - follicles
Grass seed - papilla
Gardner comes along and cuts the grass - barber snips it
I think these analogies used in this short essay about hair/ hair loss are effective. I see how a field of grass is just like a head of hair. I really think the author did a great job using all the analogies he did in this essay.
2. The writer uses an illustration to show parts of a hair stem. Study the illustration and explain why it does or does no help clarify the message.
I think that that above image that was included in the essay by the author does give you a better visual and helps to clarify the story. I mean, I think the author did a fantastic job of giving the reader visualization of the message just in his analogies; but I think this illustration gave more to the essay.
3. Review the introduction to the essay, noting the author’s purpose for the writing. Then describe his voice and explain why it does or does not help his purpose.
I think the author’s introduction to the essay was a good way to lead into his purpose. He sets up his analogies right away. I thin his voice throughout the essay shows his knowledge of hair and his ability to relate that to a field of grass.
Sunday, March 1, 2009
Chapter 14 - Classification Exercise
Chapter 14 - Classification - Exercise
Three Family Cancers - Reading for Better Writing - Exercise Page 207:
1. The writer opens and closes the essay with a personal anecdote. Explain why this story does or does not strengthen the essay.
I think the author adding in her personal anecdote in the beginning and end of this essay does strengthen this essay. It adds a personal touch and another angle to the essay. She talks about her own personal experiences dealing with three types of cancer, informs the reader of facts on these three cancers, and gives some statistics as well. I think this was a well-rounded essay.
2. For each subgroup (type of cancer), the writer uses a grandparent as an example. Explain how her use of examples does or does not help clarify the subject.
I think the writer using a grandparent as an example for each type of cancer does help to clarify the subject. She states facts for each type as well as showing the reader how in her life these facts have played out. I think the examples of her grandparents make the reader more apart of the story. Reading these examples helps the reader to relate more and understand more the results of cancer.
3. Where in the essay does the writer compare and contrast different forms of cancer? Is the comparison and contrast effective? Why or why not?
In paragraph five the author gives a comparison and contrast of different types of cancer and how they can be exposed. Other than that, throughout her whole essay is an indirect comparison and contrast of different cancers. I don’t think her comparison and contrast was effective. I think this essay was more of describing three types of cancers. I did not feel a strong comparison and contrast while reading the essay.
4. Writing about a scientific topic like cancer nearly always requires technical terminology. Cite two such terms used in this essay, and explain how the writer clarifies each term’s meaning.
1. Carcinogens: The author says this is cancer-causing agents and classifies them into three groups: chemicals, radiation, and viruses.
2. Multiple Myeloma: The author says this is a type of cancer that is a malignant growth of cells in the bone marrow that makes holes in the skeleton.
Three Family Cancers - Reading for Better Writing - Exercise Page 207:
1. The writer opens and closes the essay with a personal anecdote. Explain why this story does or does not strengthen the essay.
I think the author adding in her personal anecdote in the beginning and end of this essay does strengthen this essay. It adds a personal touch and another angle to the essay. She talks about her own personal experiences dealing with three types of cancer, informs the reader of facts on these three cancers, and gives some statistics as well. I think this was a well-rounded essay.
2. For each subgroup (type of cancer), the writer uses a grandparent as an example. Explain how her use of examples does or does not help clarify the subject.
I think the writer using a grandparent as an example for each type of cancer does help to clarify the subject. She states facts for each type as well as showing the reader how in her life these facts have played out. I think the examples of her grandparents make the reader more apart of the story. Reading these examples helps the reader to relate more and understand more the results of cancer.
3. Where in the essay does the writer compare and contrast different forms of cancer? Is the comparison and contrast effective? Why or why not?
In paragraph five the author gives a comparison and contrast of different types of cancer and how they can be exposed. Other than that, throughout her whole essay is an indirect comparison and contrast of different cancers. I don’t think her comparison and contrast was effective. I think this essay was more of describing three types of cancers. I did not feel a strong comparison and contrast while reading the essay.
4. Writing about a scientific topic like cancer nearly always requires technical terminology. Cite two such terms used in this essay, and explain how the writer clarifies each term’s meaning.
1. Carcinogens: The author says this is cancer-causing agents and classifies them into three groups: chemicals, radiation, and viruses.
2. Multiple Myeloma: The author says this is a type of cancer that is a malignant growth of cells in the bone marrow that makes holes in the skeleton.
Thursday, February 19, 2009
Chapter 13 - Comparison and Contrast Exercise
Chapter 13 - Comparison and Contrast - Exercise
Reading for Better Writing: A Fear Born of Sorrow - Exercise Pages 189-190
1. Review the title and explain how it does or does not forecast the essay’s main idea.
I believe the title A Fear Born of Sorrow is fitting for this essay. The author of this essay mentions a few tragedies of America as well as worldwide tragedies, but the author is mainly focused on the events of September 11th, 2001. I think her title is fitting for the words she uses to express that day in her essay.
2. The writer compares and contrasts the September 11 attack with the Oklahoma City and Pearl Harbor attacks. What does she conclude from each comparison? Explain why you do or do not agree with her.
When the author compares the September 11th attack to the Oklahoma City bombing and the attack on Pearl Harbor, she comes to the conclusion that America felt more fear and more sorrow about the 9/11 attack. The Oklahoma City bombing was more of an internal American issue. And like the author said in her essay, the person who committed this crime was arrested, tried and punished. And the Pearl Harbor attack was committed during a war and was happened on a U.S. Territory, not the mainland. I do agree with the author. September 11th happened with no warning and it was an attack on The World Trade Center, which was a huge American symbol. I agree with the author of this essay when she says, this attack forced fear upon Americans.
3. Review the essay’s final paragraph and explain why it is or is not an effective closing.
I do feel the author’s final paragraph was an effective closing. In the essay she speaks of how since 9/11 Americans feel fear and have vulnerability instead of feeling confident and invulnerable. So in her final paragraph when she speaks of this nation mourning the lives lost, but also the way of life we Americans have lost, I find it fitting.
Reading for Better Writing: A Fear Born of Sorrow - Exercise Pages 189-190
1. Review the title and explain how it does or does not forecast the essay’s main idea.
I believe the title A Fear Born of Sorrow is fitting for this essay. The author of this essay mentions a few tragedies of America as well as worldwide tragedies, but the author is mainly focused on the events of September 11th, 2001. I think her title is fitting for the words she uses to express that day in her essay.
2. The writer compares and contrasts the September 11 attack with the Oklahoma City and Pearl Harbor attacks. What does she conclude from each comparison? Explain why you do or do not agree with her.
When the author compares the September 11th attack to the Oklahoma City bombing and the attack on Pearl Harbor, she comes to the conclusion that America felt more fear and more sorrow about the 9/11 attack. The Oklahoma City bombing was more of an internal American issue. And like the author said in her essay, the person who committed this crime was arrested, tried and punished. And the Pearl Harbor attack was committed during a war and was happened on a U.S. Territory, not the mainland. I do agree with the author. September 11th happened with no warning and it was an attack on The World Trade Center, which was a huge American symbol. I agree with the author of this essay when she says, this attack forced fear upon Americans.
3. Review the essay’s final paragraph and explain why it is or is not an effective closing.
I do feel the author’s final paragraph was an effective closing. In the essay she speaks of how since 9/11 Americans feel fear and have vulnerability instead of feeling confident and invulnerable. So in her final paragraph when she speaks of this nation mourning the lives lost, but also the way of life we Americans have lost, I find it fitting.
Friday, February 13, 2009
Chapter 12 - Cause and Effect - Exercise
The College Writer: Chapter 12 – Cause and Effect – Exercise
Our Tired, Our Poor, Our Kids - Reading for Better Writing Exercise - Page 183:
1. In one sentence, state the cause/effect relationship that Quindlen outlines in “Our Tired, Our Poor, Our Kids.”
Homelessness in America is on the rise due to low-minimum wage and cutting or terminating of peoples welfare benefits or EARP (Emergency Assistance Rehousing Program).
2. In writing, an allusion is an indirect reference to another text. What allusions can you identify in this piece? Why does the writer use allusions in this essay?
This author makes reference to surveys or statistics that were made or completed by New York City, the National Low Income Housing Coalition, San Diego and the Home for the Homeless. I think the author uses these allusions in this essay to give the reader a better understanding of what is really going on out there in America. I think many people do not know or understand the severity of the homeless in this country.
3. Use a pencil or sticky notes to distinguish portions of the essay where Quindlen addresses the cause(s) and the effect(s) of the problem. What is the approximate ratio of space given to each? How are the cause and effect sections arranged? How do these factors affect the essay’s message?
In the first two paragraphs, the author shows effects. In Paragraph one, when the author is talking about six people living in the same room, furniture stacked up and side by side, and just the conditions in general. In paragraph two the author seems to be showing the difference between the more fortunate and the homeless in this country. He also lists out some statistics for the reader. In paragraphs three and four I think there is a combination of cause and effect. The paragraph talks about people on EARP. The author shows us the cause of a person with EARP, and the effect of when a landlord finds out about it, they will not get a call back. Paragraph five tells us about middle-class America and then shares how much the rent on a two-bedroom apartment is. The effect of this is shown in paragraph six, which is that people who make minimum wage cannot afford these high rents. Paragraph seven holds both cause and effect. It lists out some more studies done on how welfare reform has made homelessness worse. The last two paragraphs of this article/ story are a summarization. The ratio of space given to each cause and effect is probably 4 to 6 with the effects standing out more in this essay. The cause and effect sections of the essay are mostly combined. In reading it, you get a more clear understanding of the homelessness in this country.
4. Notice that Quindlen occasionally begins sentences with conjunctions such as but or and. Where, and why? Where might this strategy work in your writing?
The author seemed to start sentences with the words “but” and “and” when comparing middle-class Americans to the homelessness in America or when he was trying to say that this situation can happen to anyone.
Our Tired, Our Poor, Our Kids - Reading for Better Writing Exercise - Page 183:
1. In one sentence, state the cause/effect relationship that Quindlen outlines in “Our Tired, Our Poor, Our Kids.”
Homelessness in America is on the rise due to low-minimum wage and cutting or terminating of peoples welfare benefits or EARP (Emergency Assistance Rehousing Program).
2. In writing, an allusion is an indirect reference to another text. What allusions can you identify in this piece? Why does the writer use allusions in this essay?
This author makes reference to surveys or statistics that were made or completed by New York City, the National Low Income Housing Coalition, San Diego and the Home for the Homeless. I think the author uses these allusions in this essay to give the reader a better understanding of what is really going on out there in America. I think many people do not know or understand the severity of the homeless in this country.
3. Use a pencil or sticky notes to distinguish portions of the essay where Quindlen addresses the cause(s) and the effect(s) of the problem. What is the approximate ratio of space given to each? How are the cause and effect sections arranged? How do these factors affect the essay’s message?
In the first two paragraphs, the author shows effects. In Paragraph one, when the author is talking about six people living in the same room, furniture stacked up and side by side, and just the conditions in general. In paragraph two the author seems to be showing the difference between the more fortunate and the homeless in this country. He also lists out some statistics for the reader. In paragraphs three and four I think there is a combination of cause and effect. The paragraph talks about people on EARP. The author shows us the cause of a person with EARP, and the effect of when a landlord finds out about it, they will not get a call back. Paragraph five tells us about middle-class America and then shares how much the rent on a two-bedroom apartment is. The effect of this is shown in paragraph six, which is that people who make minimum wage cannot afford these high rents. Paragraph seven holds both cause and effect. It lists out some more studies done on how welfare reform has made homelessness worse. The last two paragraphs of this article/ story are a summarization. The ratio of space given to each cause and effect is probably 4 to 6 with the effects standing out more in this essay. The cause and effect sections of the essay are mostly combined. In reading it, you get a more clear understanding of the homelessness in this country.
4. Notice that Quindlen occasionally begins sentences with conjunctions such as but or and. Where, and why? Where might this strategy work in your writing?
The author seemed to start sentences with the words “but” and “and” when comparing middle-class Americans to the homelessness in America or when he was trying to say that this situation can happen to anyone.
Saturday, January 31, 2009
Chapter 11 - Description and Reflection - Exercise
“The College Writer”: Chapter 11 – Description and Reflection – Exercise
“Call Me Crazy, But I Have To Be Myself” – Reading for Better Writing – Page 159-160
1. What purpose does Seymour identify for writing the essay? What other purposes might be served by publishing this piece for Newsweek’s readers?
Seymour states the reason why she is writing this essay is to tell about and show who her “true” self is. She is tired of hiding part of herself from the world. By publishing this piece in Newsweek, readers with the same issue may realize that they are not alone; that there are people with the same bipolar disorder and that it is possible to live a normal life. It is possible for a person with bipolar disorder to be a functioning part of society. There are many things that can help; medication, therapy, etc.
2. The writer starts with one category label for herself (“mentally ill”) and then quickly adds another (“functional member of society”). How does this second label redefine the first?
I think by identifying herself as both mentally ill and a functioning member of society shows that there are different levels of the “mentally ill”; just because you have a disorder of the mind does not mean that you are less than. I think that when you first read her first label of “mentally ill”, you think of a crazy person who is incapable of anything but being crazy. Then you she labels herself as a “functional member of society” you feel like she becomes more of a “normal” person; a person in which everyone can relate to.
3. Description is used to support many other kinds of writing, including the types of analytical and persuasive writing outlined here in The College Writer. In what other chapters could this essay have been included, and how do you know?
I think this essay could also be included in chapters regarding narrative, descriptive, reflective, analytical and persuasive writing. This is already apart of the narrative, descriptive and reflective chapters. The reason I think it can be in the chapter regarding analytical writing is because the author, Seymour is analyzing herself and her situation is this essay. I have yet to read the analytical writing chapters, but I will assume that will be the directions given, is to analyze. The reason I see this essay fit for the chapter on persuasive writing is because the author is sort of persuading you to see that a person with a mental disorder can still be considered a normal functioning part of society. She is taking a position and asking the readers to see that position too. This essay could probably also go into the report writing chapter and the research chapter if some more information was added. Like if the author of this essay had added some experiments, field reports, or added some research done on people with bipolar disorder in society.
4. Review the section of this book on “Editing and Proofreading” (pages 83-98), especially the portion on biased words. Why does Seymour use the phrase “call me crazy”? Is her use of the word biased or insulting? Explain.
I believe Seymour used the phrase “call me crazy” because she feels like people may perceive her that way for telling her story or that bipolar disorder means that a person is “crazy.” I personally don’t think her use of the word “crazy” is showing a bias or being insulting, but according to the “Editing and Proofreading” pages in this book, it may be a biased word. On page 95, it talks about words referring to conditions. The word “crazy” is not on the list, but the book does say, for example, you should not write “cripple”, but instead write, “person who has difficulty walking.” So after seeing that, maybe Seymour should have said something like, “a person with a mental disorder” or something close to that. But for me personally, I took no offense to the word “crazy.”
“Call Me Crazy, But I Have To Be Myself” – Reading for Better Writing – Page 159-160
1. What purpose does Seymour identify for writing the essay? What other purposes might be served by publishing this piece for Newsweek’s readers?
Seymour states the reason why she is writing this essay is to tell about and show who her “true” self is. She is tired of hiding part of herself from the world. By publishing this piece in Newsweek, readers with the same issue may realize that they are not alone; that there are people with the same bipolar disorder and that it is possible to live a normal life. It is possible for a person with bipolar disorder to be a functioning part of society. There are many things that can help; medication, therapy, etc.
2. The writer starts with one category label for herself (“mentally ill”) and then quickly adds another (“functional member of society”). How does this second label redefine the first?
I think by identifying herself as both mentally ill and a functioning member of society shows that there are different levels of the “mentally ill”; just because you have a disorder of the mind does not mean that you are less than. I think that when you first read her first label of “mentally ill”, you think of a crazy person who is incapable of anything but being crazy. Then you she labels herself as a “functional member of society” you feel like she becomes more of a “normal” person; a person in which everyone can relate to.
3. Description is used to support many other kinds of writing, including the types of analytical and persuasive writing outlined here in The College Writer. In what other chapters could this essay have been included, and how do you know?
I think this essay could also be included in chapters regarding narrative, descriptive, reflective, analytical and persuasive writing. This is already apart of the narrative, descriptive and reflective chapters. The reason I think it can be in the chapter regarding analytical writing is because the author, Seymour is analyzing herself and her situation is this essay. I have yet to read the analytical writing chapters, but I will assume that will be the directions given, is to analyze. The reason I see this essay fit for the chapter on persuasive writing is because the author is sort of persuading you to see that a person with a mental disorder can still be considered a normal functioning part of society. She is taking a position and asking the readers to see that position too. This essay could probably also go into the report writing chapter and the research chapter if some more information was added. Like if the author of this essay had added some experiments, field reports, or added some research done on people with bipolar disorder in society.
4. Review the section of this book on “Editing and Proofreading” (pages 83-98), especially the portion on biased words. Why does Seymour use the phrase “call me crazy”? Is her use of the word biased or insulting? Explain.
I believe Seymour used the phrase “call me crazy” because she feels like people may perceive her that way for telling her story or that bipolar disorder means that a person is “crazy.” I personally don’t think her use of the word “crazy” is showing a bias or being insulting, but according to the “Editing and Proofreading” pages in this book, it may be a biased word. On page 95, it talks about words referring to conditions. The word “crazy” is not on the list, but the book does say, for example, you should not write “cripple”, but instead write, “person who has difficulty walking.” So after seeing that, maybe Seymour should have said something like, “a person with a mental disorder” or something close to that. But for me personally, I took no offense to the word “crazy.”
Friday, January 30, 2009
Chapter 10 - Narration and Description Exercise
“The College Writer”: Chapter 10 – Narration and Description – Exercise
Reading for Better Writing – Exercise – page 139
1. In the first three paragraphs of his essay, the writer describes Highland. Cite passages that do or do not help you see the setting. What mood or feeling does the description evoke?
In the first three paragraphs, the writer helps me to visualize Highland by saying things like,” beautiful fall days…. on the Great Plains”, “warm southern breezes”, ”sun smiles with gentleness”,” spacious sky reigns over everything”, and “ghost town, Highland, Iowa.” These types of statements give me a picture of wide open spaces, where the air is fresh, the sun beams down on you, and the sky seems to stretch as far as you can see all over or around this little ghost town. The writer goes on to describe how the lands were once divided into 160-acre chunks and since then towns have dies out. The writer talks about the Protestant churches, horse barns and a blacksmith shop. I am picturing a deserted town in the middle of wide open space. I feel a sense of peace and the want to take in the amazing views of nature. On the other hand, when the writer mentions it being like a ghost town, I feel a tiny bit of eeriness.
2. James C. Schaap, himself a writer, takes his students to Highland, where he asks them to use the setting as a writing prompt. What could students learn from the experience? Why?
I think the atmosphere of this place will give the students the ability to learn to open their minds. The place seems to be so wide open and a place where you can breathe in nature at its best. I also think it sounds like the students can learn a little bit about the history of that area. See how years can change a place. The professor/ writer taking his students to this town of Highland, takes them out of their normal everyday lives, shows and gives them a change of pace, a chance to see things in a different light.
3. Schaap concludes the essay by saying that his students’ presence in Highland on September 11 was “a kind of blessing.” What does he mean?
I think the writer is trying to point out how on September 11, 2001, America was awakened with a tremendous amount of shock, terror and sadness. I think he was trying to say that the students he had with him in Highland on that day, at that time had the “blessing” of not partaking in so much of that shock, terror and sadness. They were able to see something beautiful in nature and clear their minds. And then maybe when going back and learning the news, they were able to deal with it better.
4. What do you think the writer is trying to say in the last several lines?
I think the writer is just simply trying to point out how much he really enjoys this place in Highland, Iowa. He looks at this place, or taking this trip, as such a joyful part of his life. So on September 11, 2001, he was glad to be seeing something so beautiful and peaceful before finding out about the horrors that took place that day.
Reading for Better Writing – Exercise – page 139
1. In the first three paragraphs of his essay, the writer describes Highland. Cite passages that do or do not help you see the setting. What mood or feeling does the description evoke?
In the first three paragraphs, the writer helps me to visualize Highland by saying things like,” beautiful fall days…. on the Great Plains”, “warm southern breezes”, ”sun smiles with gentleness”,” spacious sky reigns over everything”, and “ghost town, Highland, Iowa.” These types of statements give me a picture of wide open spaces, where the air is fresh, the sun beams down on you, and the sky seems to stretch as far as you can see all over or around this little ghost town. The writer goes on to describe how the lands were once divided into 160-acre chunks and since then towns have dies out. The writer talks about the Protestant churches, horse barns and a blacksmith shop. I am picturing a deserted town in the middle of wide open space. I feel a sense of peace and the want to take in the amazing views of nature. On the other hand, when the writer mentions it being like a ghost town, I feel a tiny bit of eeriness.
2. James C. Schaap, himself a writer, takes his students to Highland, where he asks them to use the setting as a writing prompt. What could students learn from the experience? Why?
I think the atmosphere of this place will give the students the ability to learn to open their minds. The place seems to be so wide open and a place where you can breathe in nature at its best. I also think it sounds like the students can learn a little bit about the history of that area. See how years can change a place. The professor/ writer taking his students to this town of Highland, takes them out of their normal everyday lives, shows and gives them a change of pace, a chance to see things in a different light.
3. Schaap concludes the essay by saying that his students’ presence in Highland on September 11 was “a kind of blessing.” What does he mean?
I think the writer is trying to point out how on September 11, 2001, America was awakened with a tremendous amount of shock, terror and sadness. I think he was trying to say that the students he had with him in Highland on that day, at that time had the “blessing” of not partaking in so much of that shock, terror and sadness. They were able to see something beautiful in nature and clear their minds. And then maybe when going back and learning the news, they were able to deal with it better.
4. What do you think the writer is trying to say in the last several lines?
I think the writer is just simply trying to point out how much he really enjoys this place in Highland, Iowa. He looks at this place, or taking this trip, as such a joyful part of his life. So on September 11, 2001, he was glad to be seeing something so beautiful and peaceful before finding out about the horrors that took place that day.
Thursday, January 29, 2009
Chapter 8 - One Writer's Process - Exercise
“The College Writer”: Chapter 8 – One Writer’s Process – Exercise
Exercise #1 – Page 119
Review Angela’s writing process. How does it compare with your own writing process on a recent assignment?
At this point, I have only had one essay writing assignment, which was my Self Introduction Essay, so I will base my answer to this question on how I wrote that essay. In writing the Self Introduction Essay I did examine the assignment; figure out the subject, purpose, and audience. I also made a mind map, which assisted me in writing the essay. I feel like when I wrote the essay, I was mostly doing freewriting. The topic was myself, which is an easy topic to write about; it required no research. I organized the essay into five paragraphs: an introduction, past, present and future and a closing. I will admit, I did not do any revisions and I just briefly looked over the finished product for any noticeable errors. After reading these eight chapters, I now understand it takes a lot more to make an essay a finished product to be proud of. I will take all that I have learned here and try to apply it in future essays.
Exercise #1 – Page 119
Review Angela’s writing process. How does it compare with your own writing process on a recent assignment?
At this point, I have only had one essay writing assignment, which was my Self Introduction Essay, so I will base my answer to this question on how I wrote that essay. In writing the Self Introduction Essay I did examine the assignment; figure out the subject, purpose, and audience. I also made a mind map, which assisted me in writing the essay. I feel like when I wrote the essay, I was mostly doing freewriting. The topic was myself, which is an easy topic to write about; it required no research. I organized the essay into five paragraphs: an introduction, past, present and future and a closing. I will admit, I did not do any revisions and I just briefly looked over the finished product for any noticeable errors. After reading these eight chapters, I now understand it takes a lot more to make an essay a finished product to be proud of. I will take all that I have learned here and try to apply it in future essays.
Chapter 7 - Submitting Writing and Creating Portfolios Exercise
“The College Writer”: Chapter 7: Submitting Writing and Creating Portfolios – Exercise
Exercise # 1 – Page 102
Choose one of your recent writing assignments and use the instructions on page 100 to access the quality of your formatting and page design. Edit and redesign the paper as needed.
Self Introduction Essay
My name is Carrie Karp and I am twenty-six years old. I was born in Burlingame,
California. Although I moved around quite a bit throughout my life, I have always lived in the
Bay Area. I spent about the first ten to twelve years of my life living on the Peninsula. The
remaining fourteen to sixteen years, I have lived in the East Bay. I am an only child, although I
do have step-siblings whom I consider to be almost like blood relatives. My parents got divorced
when I was very young and my step father and his children have been in my life since I was
about two years old.
I come from a mixed background. My mom’s mother, Nani as we call her, is part Scottish,
French, and English. She would be considered a fifth generation San Franciscan. My mom’s
father, my Grandpa Al, was Croatian. Both of his parents came over to San Francisco from
Yugoslavia. My Grandpa Al would be considered a first generation San Franciscan. My mom’s
parents had eight kids total. I have a very large family that just keeps growing! My dad’s father,
my Grandpa Lenny, is German. I am not sure as to when his family came to the United States.
His mother, my Grandma June, is Italian. She came to the United States from Italy. She is from
Genova, which is northern Italy. My father’s parents had only two children. So that part of my family is not so big. After that summary of where I have come from, I would say that I am a mix
of Italian, German, Scottish, French and English.
Currently I am living in Livermore with my fiancé and our two dogs, Cody and Bella. Cody
and Bella are Labrador Retrievers. I am a HUGE animal lover! I almost wish I could have a
household full of all different pets. The reason I say almost is because I know how much goes
into having a pet; feeding them, bathing them, taking them to the vet, etc. I believe pets are a
huge responsibility and you should not own a pet unless you understand that. So, two dogs are
all that I can handle right now. I also think there is nothing better to me than spending time with
family and friends. As I grow and mature, I realize that family and friends (and pets too) is what
makes your life rich and full of happiness and love. Some of my hobbies or “loves of life” are
travelling, although I have not done much of it yet, eating good food and watching good movies
every now and again. I also love to do arts and crafts, cooking/ baking, to visit museums, and go
shopping.
As for the near future, my fiancé and I are getting married in August of this year, which I
am super excited for. I just started attending Lincoln University in the fall semester of 2008. I
am aiming towards my Associates of Science degree in Diagnostic Imaging with my
concentration being General Sonography. I never thought I would go to college after high school,
but as some years past, I realize the importance of an education. I believe that being educated
means having confidence and opens doors for you in life.
My goals for the present and the future are to concentrate on school, do my best to
achieve good grades while absorbing all information taught to me and ultimately to find a job as
an Ultrasound Tech. I want the kind of job that I will be happy to go to everyday. I also want job
security and good pay. I believe all of this will come with working as an Ultrasound Tech. I also
want to start a family within the next three to four years. I cannot wait to experience the joys of
being a parent. I have no doubts that there will be hard times, but I embrace them and look
forward to all the good to come as well. I am so looking forward to the years to come.
Exercise # 1 – Page 102
Choose one of your recent writing assignments and use the instructions on page 100 to access the quality of your formatting and page design. Edit and redesign the paper as needed.
Self Introduction Essay
My name is Carrie Karp and I am twenty-six years old. I was born in Burlingame,
California. Although I moved around quite a bit throughout my life, I have always lived in the
Bay Area. I spent about the first ten to twelve years of my life living on the Peninsula. The
remaining fourteen to sixteen years, I have lived in the East Bay. I am an only child, although I
do have step-siblings whom I consider to be almost like blood relatives. My parents got divorced
when I was very young and my step father and his children have been in my life since I was
about two years old.
I come from a mixed background. My mom’s mother, Nani as we call her, is part Scottish,
French, and English. She would be considered a fifth generation San Franciscan. My mom’s
father, my Grandpa Al, was Croatian. Both of his parents came over to San Francisco from
Yugoslavia. My Grandpa Al would be considered a first generation San Franciscan. My mom’s
parents had eight kids total. I have a very large family that just keeps growing! My dad’s father,
my Grandpa Lenny, is German. I am not sure as to when his family came to the United States.
His mother, my Grandma June, is Italian. She came to the United States from Italy. She is from
Genova, which is northern Italy. My father’s parents had only two children. So that part of my family is not so big. After that summary of where I have come from, I would say that I am a mix
of Italian, German, Scottish, French and English.
Currently I am living in Livermore with my fiancé and our two dogs, Cody and Bella. Cody
and Bella are Labrador Retrievers. I am a HUGE animal lover! I almost wish I could have a
household full of all different pets. The reason I say almost is because I know how much goes
into having a pet; feeding them, bathing them, taking them to the vet, etc. I believe pets are a
huge responsibility and you should not own a pet unless you understand that. So, two dogs are
all that I can handle right now. I also think there is nothing better to me than spending time with
family and friends. As I grow and mature, I realize that family and friends (and pets too) is what
makes your life rich and full of happiness and love. Some of my hobbies or “loves of life” are
travelling, although I have not done much of it yet, eating good food and watching good movies
every now and again. I also love to do arts and crafts, cooking/ baking, to visit museums, and go
shopping.
As for the near future, my fiancé and I are getting married in August of this year, which I
am super excited for. I just started attending Lincoln University in the fall semester of 2008. I
am aiming towards my Associates of Science degree in Diagnostic Imaging with my
concentration being General Sonography. I never thought I would go to college after high school,
but as some years past, I realize the importance of an education. I believe that being educated
means having confidence and opens doors for you in life.
My goals for the present and the future are to concentrate on school, do my best to
achieve good grades while absorbing all information taught to me and ultimately to find a job as
an Ultrasound Tech. I want the kind of job that I will be happy to go to everyday. I also want job
security and good pay. I believe all of this will come with working as an Ultrasound Tech. I also
want to start a family within the next three to four years. I cannot wait to experience the joys of
being a parent. I have no doubts that there will be hard times, but I embrace them and look
forward to all the good to come as well. I am so looking forward to the years to come.
Chapter 6 - Exercise
“The College Writer”: Chapter 6 Editing and Proofreading – Exercise
Exercise #3 – Page 98
Combine some of the following ideas into longer, more mature sentences. Write at least four sentences, using page 85 as a guide.
1. A well-trained dog is a pleasure to its owner and to others, although dogs can be difficult to train.
2. Dogs can be difficult to train; the necessary supplies include patience, a leash and treats.
3. Not only do dogs like to please their owners, but a well-trained dog is a pleasure to its owner and to others.
4. Training is not a chore for dogs because dogs like to please their owners.
Exercise #3 – Page 98
Combine some of the following ideas into longer, more mature sentences. Write at least four sentences, using page 85 as a guide.
1. A well-trained dog is a pleasure to its owner and to others, although dogs can be difficult to train.
2. Dogs can be difficult to train; the necessary supplies include patience, a leash and treats.
3. Not only do dogs like to please their owners, but a well-trained dog is a pleasure to its owner and to others.
4. Training is not a chore for dogs because dogs like to please their owners.
Wednesday, January 28, 2009
Chapter 3 - Planning - Exercise
“The College Writer”: Chapter 3 – Planning – Exercise
Exercise #1: Author Ken Macrorie claims that “Good writing is formed partly through plan and partly through accident,” Do you agree? Why or why not? Relate Macrorie’s idea to your own writing experiences. How carefully do you plan? How much do you leave to accident?
I completely agree with this statement that the author Ken Macrorie claims above. Yes, I think that an essential part of writing is research and planning for your essay. I also believe that as your brain processes the information as you go along. During this time that you are planning and analyzing the material, new ideas and thoughts may come to mind. That is what this chapter in the book talks about; a “working” thesis. You may write your thesis statement, but after gathering more information and analyzing it a bit, you may change your ideas. If you are dealing with a more narrative, personal experience essay, I think most of this essay’s final draft will be accidental. That is why when you write a paper, you normally have many drafts. It is because of the accidental thoughts that come in and that you jot down. I have done that many of times in everything that I write. Whether you are writing in a card, or writing a note, or an essay, you are bound to have some “accidental” writing pop in there. I think the amount of accidents you input into writing depends. I think that is different each time.
Exercise #1: Author Ken Macrorie claims that “Good writing is formed partly through plan and partly through accident,” Do you agree? Why or why not? Relate Macrorie’s idea to your own writing experiences. How carefully do you plan? How much do you leave to accident?
I completely agree with this statement that the author Ken Macrorie claims above. Yes, I think that an essential part of writing is research and planning for your essay. I also believe that as your brain processes the information as you go along. During this time that you are planning and analyzing the material, new ideas and thoughts may come to mind. That is what this chapter in the book talks about; a “working” thesis. You may write your thesis statement, but after gathering more information and analyzing it a bit, you may change your ideas. If you are dealing with a more narrative, personal experience essay, I think most of this essay’s final draft will be accidental. That is why when you write a paper, you normally have many drafts. It is because of the accidental thoughts that come in and that you jot down. I have done that many of times in everything that I write. Whether you are writing in a card, or writing a note, or an essay, you are bound to have some “accidental” writing pop in there. I think the amount of accidents you input into writing depends. I think that is different each time.
Saturday, January 24, 2009
Chapter 2 - Beginning the Writing Process - Exercise
“The College Writer”: Chapter 2 – Beginning the Writing Process – Exercise
Exercise 1
I re-read the only essay that I have written so far this semester, which was the Self Introduction Essay. I think in this type of an essay it was very easy to show that I have a thorough understanding of the subject, because the subject was me. I do believe I met the needs of my audience. I wrote the essay in five paragraphs as outlined by my instructor, Dr. Sylvia Schoemaker Rippel. The first paragraph was to be an introduction, followed by three paragraphs to develop, one past, one present and one future. The final paragraph was to conclude my essay.
If I could say that I could better any part of this essay, I would have to say the conclusion could be better. I am not the best when it comes to writing conclusions. I always feel like something is missing. Overall, this essay I am sure was not written perfectly. I am sure there are a number of improvements I can make to my writing, which I hope to learn this semester. I do think I achieved at least the purpose of this essay. I believe I shared quite a bit about myself with the reader throughout my essay and this was the assignment.
Exercise 1
I re-read the only essay that I have written so far this semester, which was the Self Introduction Essay. I think in this type of an essay it was very easy to show that I have a thorough understanding of the subject, because the subject was me. I do believe I met the needs of my audience. I wrote the essay in five paragraphs as outlined by my instructor, Dr. Sylvia Schoemaker Rippel. The first paragraph was to be an introduction, followed by three paragraphs to develop, one past, one present and one future. The final paragraph was to conclude my essay.
If I could say that I could better any part of this essay, I would have to say the conclusion could be better. I am not the best when it comes to writing conclusions. I always feel like something is missing. Overall, this essay I am sure was not written perfectly. I am sure there are a number of improvements I can make to my writing, which I hope to learn this semester. I do think I achieved at least the purpose of this essay. I believe I shared quite a bit about myself with the reader throughout my essay and this was the assignment.
Chapter 1 - Exercise
“The College Writer”: Chapter 1 Exercise
Exercise 3
Exercise 3
Looking at this image I can see two images combined into one. First there is the word “poetry” written on what appears to be a book. Paying closer attention to this image I can see that the book is also a butterfly’s wings. The wings of the butterfly are moving as I can tell by the little lines above the pages of the book. You can also see the butterfly’s head, antennas, and even the body with a tail. I believe the meaning behind this image is to pass along the message of poetry. Poetry is free; it can make you feel like you are flying. With poetry there is no right or wrong. It is beautiful, just like a butterfly. I get a real artsy feeling from viewing this image. This image can appeal to a person’s creative side. Maybe someone who has never tried poetry, if they studied this image long enough, would get the feeling of freedom and try writing some.
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